Hey Vic and Tammy,
I like the vocals, music, and production. Lyrical tweaks/comments below. Keep or sweep smile


V1
I want you to trust everything that I do
My lips don't lie when I say to you
Baby when you're not here seems my life falls apart
So if you think it ain't true it's just your jealous heart
([color:#000099]apart and heart are cliché rhymes[/color])

V2
No other man makes me turn my head
I'd rather share my love with you instead ([color:#000099]instead is there for the rhyme, but not needed, since you say "I'd rather share my love with you...that's a complete thought...the instead is understood without stating it.)[/color]

Believe what I say it doesn't have to be this hard
When your feeling that way it's just your jealous heart (rhyming [color:#000099]hard with heart is almost like mating the same word; I'd consider a different rhyme mate.[/color])

Chorus:
Jealous heart, how could you think the things you do
Jealous heart, when we keep staying here with you ... here with you

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V3
When there's green in our eyes then we understand
That our feelings could easily get out of hand
(I believe that a line has more punch with the main idea at or near the end of the line; that said; the first line of verse 3 would be more stronger as:
[color:#000099]We understand when there's green in our eyes
[/color]


(Of course, that changes the end rhyme for the following line; so let's see if we can come up with an alternate line that rhymes with [color:#000099][b]eyes:[/color][/b]

Suspicious feelings begin to arise

But we love each other and that's how it's been from the start
And we won't give in to this foolish jealous heart
([color:#000099]start and heart are also cliché rhymes[/color])

Chorus:
Jealous heart, how could you think the things you do
Jealous heart, when we keep staying here with you

Chorus:
Jealous heart, how could you think the things you do
Jealous heart, when we keep staying here with you ... here with you



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