You're getting more to the point yipee!!!

Keep in mind "mirror" songs can be "over-done"... And I'm not so sure you even want that in your title for the sake of .. well... I think I've heard all the MIRROR songs I'd like too.. haha

I like the way you added the part about "practicing" in front of the mirror.. which is a REAL image the listener can picture in their mind.

I might want to play around with the hook/title a bit more to give your chorus something with a little more MEAT on it.
Maybe, something he says to himself?

"WHAT ARE YOU WAITING FOR?"
"WHAT KIND OF MAN "IN LOVE" ARE YOU?"
"WHAT DOES SHE SEE IN ME?"

HERE'S SOME LINE BY LINE THOUGHTS:::::
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Mirror Mirror staring back at me
Tell me who it is she really sees
Is it real or is it all a dream
(is this real love or is it all a dream)
otherwise we don't know what IT is.

I need to know why she’s in love with me
(to this line I would say. "why NOT you?")
Why does the singer think he's so awful someone can't fall in love with him?


Chorus
I wonder am I the crazy one
To doubt what she’s so certain of
( i like this line alot!)
(he's saying.. how can she just jump right in and say she loves me.. without being afraid?)


why do I want to turn and run
Why am I afraid that I'm falling in love

(I DON'T KNOW,, WHY "DO" YOU WANT TO TURN AND RUN? )

V2
Mirror do I see a stupid man
To doubt what's there in his own two hands
What did I do to make her open her heart
Why am I making this love so hard

(here he's saying.. you dumb@ss, what are you waiting for, girls like her don't just fall out of the sky) But then you go back to the What did I do part... which through me off)

Chorus

Mirror show me how the game is played
What do I do, What do I say
Time is quickly closing in on me
Soon It will be to late to turn away

(I think this is repeating what you've already said.. you need to move the story forward.. like "she's on her way over to my house and etc. etc)

I stand in front of you every day
Work out each word that I'm gonna say
Each day that goes by, I'm feeling sure
I need you more that the day before
(IT SOUNDS HERE LIKE HE'S SAYING HE NEEDS THE "MIRROR").. watch those pronouns<< hehehe


Chorus

Mirror I can see a lonely man
(HOW CAN YOU BE LONELY WHEN SOMEONE IS IN LOVE WITH YOU?)

Who wants to love some one the best he can
I need to give her all I have
Let her know that she drives me mad

(I'D SAVE THE ENDING FOR WHAT HE ACTUALLY ENDS UP SAYING TO HER)



[This message has been edited by redwriter1 (edited 10-15-2003).]

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