hi Jaden

i feel the added on verses are good, but kinda rushed.

stand up for the love----of what?

is this kind of nation----just reads wrong

why not use the double meaning of the word kind and say

is this the kind nation

the next verse is completely rhetorical
it needs more substantiating evidence
but i'll leave that to you

ie: who are "those"
show them "what" way

thinking, you might just be better of, repeating the back at home verse here---being that it says the same thing, but way clearer
there's no law saying that you can only repeat the chorus.

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