Originally Posted by R. Shayne Vaughan
Good one, Scott.

Wondering about:

Her eyes shine with levity
Joy and empathy

To me, the words seem too poetic for the conversational tone of the rest of the lyric.


Hi Shayne:

Those are the lines I had in mind that I would have written differently if I was shooting for a more general purpose.

Thanks for listening and for confirming my instinct on that smile

Scott