Awww, I disagree with your clever bumping of your song!! LOL!!

This is a very pretty song and you sing it very well.

For me, and this is just my opinion as a singer, I would want the chorus to move along more so that it has move of a lift and diversity, I wouldn't have all of the rests between lines and I'd put a bit more inflection in there.

It is pretty as is, I just think a little more in the chorus would keep it flowing. Very nice song...Not sucky at all...

Tammy


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