A very different but very likeable shake up/really wake up kind of tune! Great writing Stan and Jim your vocals seem a good fit. Two things only that I was thinking as I listened to both versions. Was thinking in the last line of your Chorus not having the hook there. You have plenty of lines w/your hook (and it's a great one), but I thought to make it alittle more of a contrast there the hook was ready for a breather.

You have:

We’re all bare footing stomping in the sand
& that conga line’s real tight
Everybody's smiling here on the island
Coz The Natives are restless tonight

Something like:

We’re all bare footing stomping in the sand
& that conga line’s real tight
Everybody's smiling here on the island
Mr Moon shinin' his light (or)
Lady Moon shinin' her light (or)
Faces lit by tiki lights

You would still be hearing the hook 8 times, just not 10.

Also while the drums are great maybe go alittle softer so we can hear the words more clearly. It seems like the speed of the song in the Chorus picks up and that's good so that you have that change in pace between Chorus and verse.

Best,
Lynn smile

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