Jean- Thank you very much for your comments and suggestions. As I read through the responses here I am thinking I can probably reach more people and get my message out if I don't focus on any one group in particular. This happened to be almost exact situation that was experienced. I didn't go through and critique anything myself before I posted it. I just went out on a limb with it. I do absolutely believe vigilance is the major part of what I wanted to say. So, I will work on adding that in. Thank you for taking the time.

Ed- Thank you very much for coming back and seeing my response to your first post. Really the key here for me is that I was speaking purely from my experiences. I never really intended for it to go anywhere but here. It was something that spilled out one day and when I posted it here I posted it in it's raw form without much thought. (That is so against what I normally do because usually I am so critical of my own work that it never gets posted at all) This one was purely from my heart. However, now seeing the different responses; I do realize that perhaps this could be something if I work on it and change it up to be about many different situations rather than just the church, I will give it serious thought. And...I just saw the compliment you gave me too...thank you...I appreciate that.

Open to co-writers and collaborations with other lyricists and/or musicians.