Jim, this is a good song but wouldn't it work better if the song were directed to someone one you see was once like you and you're encouraging them to become braver in life, rather than claiming to have built a time machine and travelling back in time to visit your former self?

That seems a little silly to be honest and if he built a time machine he was obviously doing something very constructive with his life behind these walls, and if you tell him to stop doing that, he will never build the time machine and you will never be able to go back in time, and perhaps the time line would become so disrupted that you ended up becoming an alcholic bum on the streets of Amsterdamn and never became a singer-songwriter at all.

Aside from that, the song has a lot going for it, but I kind of agreed with what Mike Z said about the chorus, it's catchy, yes, but never quite comes out of first or second gear for me. In its structure it reminds me a little of the chorus of "About you now" by the Sugarbabes, and that chorus moves up and down the gears in a more fluidic fashion compared to this chours.

Anyway, like I said, it's a good song so good luck with it.


Lucian