thank you both ! Kaley how is it now as far as introdicing Emma in line 7 below ?? IM not sure what you mean on the 2nd verse? do you think i should just have a 4 line verse of this below (bottom)

Danny dropped his dum dum on the playground
picked it up and took a look around
the other kids were busy playing duck duck goose
so he did what any other little boy would do
he wiped it off and stuck it right back in his cheek
then he heard " eww your gross" coming from a tree
busted by Emma Lee the cutest girl in school
(but) she just smiled and said" na, its cool "
v2


the Bible says we must be spotless and pure
but it's not talking about our exterior
why ,you could stand before God covered in mud
just as long as your washed in the blood !


chorus


and 9 ne ..i wanted to make this one for a kids cd ..i certainly see your point about bigger appeal..maybe I 'll do 2 versions!!

thanks!

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