Louis, right now i'm focusing on the transition from verse to chorus. I'm counting your song in a slow '2' one...two, etc.

it's not the sustain of your notes, it's a phrasing matter.

The verse is 3 phrases of 4 2-beat groups. so it's kind of short. it flows well and the most common problem is to rush in the chorus.

The pick up into your chorus is a full two beats. "I remember" You're treatment of begining "I" on count one is throwing things a bit off. The more i listen and break it down, I want to sing "I" after count one and it becomes more of a pick up or lead into the chorus.

This is really hard to describe. give me some time please, i may have some suggestions. I'm wondering if others hear what i am or not.

Dave

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