Hello Mike,
My Grandma used to beat me, too. She used her walking cane. It was very difficult to live with a large-bodied person who kept me in fear most of my childhood. When I got older and learned about the reasons why people act out in such ways, it replaced my anger with understanding. So, your story was very real to me.

Now, the writing was very well done, too. I enjoyed the imagery, suspense and especially the last line. How wonderful it must be to create such effects with your talent! It sure is great to see a craft well executed! Thanks for the fun read! It brought back memories of garlic...

I guess an alternative title might be, "The Scent of Fear." Do you smell something scary? Oh, that's my critique!

Heidi

Last edited by Thompson; 05/18/07 05:37 AM.
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