It's nice and airy but the contrast is the issue for me. It should sound more like a protest and less like liberal, post-coital ruminations. The words as good as they are lost in translation by the stark contrasts between the angst of the message and the messenger, who is clearly thinking about something else.

Write on, Man,
Michael W. Brown, f.k.a. "bluesriff"

"The best way to find yourself is to lose yourself in the service of others."
Mahatma Gandhi