Writing from the perspective of an unborn child dealing with maternal addiction is an incredibly daring choice. It showcases an ability to tackle complex, uncomfortable human conditions without relying on cliché. The recurring line "Music under water sounds so beautiful" is genuinely brilliant lyricism. It creates a haunting, cinematic contrast to the dark theme.

The imagery here is incredibly powerful, and the 'womb POV' is a daring, creative choice—especially the metaphor of underwater music. It’s undeniably strong writing. However, because the subject matter is so heavy and raw, it feels like a niche piece rather than a commercial track. It's tough to digest, which means it might struggle with repeat streams or mainstream appeal. If the goal is marketability, opening up the chorus to a more universal emotional hook could help listeners connect without feeling overwhelmed by the darkness of the verses.

I have to admit, I enjoyed listening to this but it did give me shivers. You are a very talented writer.