Originally Posted by Fdemetrio
Originally Posted by John Voorpostel
Dom, you can definitely write something you have no experience with... LOL I do that a lot

But then I do a lot of research into the topic...nail down vernaculars to make things sound more real etc.

What you show in you writing is that you do not have the nuanced understanding of your relationship.

THAT comes with experience....but keep trying....the hook is worth it

Maybe think sitcom plots to get ideas

Maybe a visual here...you took a sledgehammer and prybar to the marble instead of a chisel and mallet.

I'd agree with that, if it was a warm and fuzzy song about playfully being afraid of your wife. I totally get it, I grew up with married parents, my brother is married, I myself lived for years at a time with partner.

But this is NOT that song, its different.

You have your own idea what the song shoukd be.

Nuanced understanding of married life does not apply here.

All my songs involve deep understanding of the character in the song.

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