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A soul broke with
too much bending
Instead of soaring
I’m descending
Is it worth the sad
How do I survive
When the color of blue
Jilted my sky
And simply
broke me in two
What’s left of me
can’t find the light
Stuck in the wreckage
of our fight
Is it worth the sad
How do I survive
When the color of blue
Jilted my sky
And simply
broke me in two
The ground beneath
won’t let me rise
Still trapped under
your endless lies
How do I survive
When the color of blue
Jilted my sky
And simply
broke me in two
This is a superb lyric, starting with the first 2 lines..... and I love how you took an old theme and burned the mundane box, most of us write in, giving it a newness that comes with the kind of writing expressed here.
A soul broke with
too much bending....simple and to the point
Is it worth the sad....just a great line....particularly...”the sad”
When the color of blue
Jilted my sky........I interpreted blue to be sadness, that’s why it makes sense
Even your use of the word “simply” is perfect....I think you may have given some thought to its use....
Excellent writing Marilyn
Steve Thank you, Steve, for your kind words. I wanted something sparse but effective and emotionally impactful. 😊🎧
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