Weird, I typed up an in depth review but it got nuked somehow.

In short, you need to rewrite "one and only" out of your lyric. I have used it myself too often, but it really is a worn out cliche. Ember is a nice word to build around, and I would rewrite the cliche lines and refocus the song to pay off the Ember focus in each verse/chorus. Use descriptive words that are less common, and remmeber to advance the story to a new place, good or bad, in each verse and even consider switching up the chorus lines so they don't repeat exactly each time through. I think that would serve your song well.

I suggest always posting a full text version of your lyrics with your song link so it is easy to breakdown while typing a response. I had broken down several examples but clicking on your link caused a hiccup and for me to lose my post. And now I would have to go back out again to re-view the lyrics on Suno.

Anyway, some thoughts. Cliches are bummers when it drowns out the best part of the song, which is the ember thread/progression.

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