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by Gary E. Andrews - 06/27/26 11:00 PM
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Hello David:
I was thinking story line-wise...acting on impulse gets singer into trouble....have him jump the light land in jail...two wrongs don't make a right? lol
More thoughts:
Important details emerge in the chorus. I wanted the chorus to be shorter, snappier, maybe. The reveal could be put in a bridge?
Also why is he better off stopped at the light....wouldn't he be better off jumping the light and making his apology, time being of the essence.
Just some random thoughts you might use or not. Seems pretty good so far though!
Bill Draper
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