Couch,

I really am digging this song--like it a lot with first listen. I also agree with you that pushing the lyrics for cleverness is a cool thing to do--not an easy task when you're telling a rhyming story at times. That is part of your artistic personification. Having said that many simple lyrics may seem simple, but conversely, "good simple" isn't always easy either. The average person listening doesn't IMO always expect to get the song's every meaning with a first listen--and isn't that why the melody train has to be damn good to get them back? You have great melody here and most listeners will enjoy the song more when they learn/grasp the lyrics. If they never get it 100%, not a big deal either. When writing more "abstractly," you can actually get away with the listener not getting the song, cause they probably never will--I'm still trying to figure out some Beatle's later music lyrics & even Dylan's "My Back Page's lyrics!"

I know these songs from your Wabash Cannonball album are final produced. But if you were taking this back to production, I'd like hearing a more pronounced/dynamic drum track, which seems the last few years to become a more common production element. Another good song Couch!

Peace,

steady-eddie