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Gary,

I do appreciate your thoughts. The trick of lyric writing is the meaning and with a few word changes like "could to would", you change the original meaning of the song. The chorus that held a purpose, now means something different. I see this as your perspective, but it isn't one of a woman who is telling her side of a story. The point of the story is being involved with someone that isn't capable of this relationship and can't see the possibilities or who isn't trying, which makes her yearning and saying "could", knowing he isn't capable. This is someone who is having a relationship and wanting something that isn't going to happen and that the other person isn't going to be able to understand. So the chorus intention is for her to convince herself to move on. There is no more questioning, she is trying to convince herself and reassure herself of the possibilities. Your changes would change the meaning and direction of the original write and I did consider the chorus/prechorus/bridge situation of the song, but I wanted to please myself vocally and challenge myself to change up my own and very usual structure and play with it a bit. I run a songwriting group and we challenge ourselves this way. I do again, appreciate the time and thought you put to this.

Tammy