Hi Michelle
John is a gifted seasoned composer and he is right in every aspect.
In order for your lyric to be set to music you need to adhere to basic rules and layout.
It would be good if you simplify the lyric by verses chorus bridge
If you were to look at say some of the well established writers of the last few decades for instance, Paul Simon. You would see the evidence of this in his lyrics
You will get plenty encouragement off fellow posters including helpful comments and ideas too..
Best of luck with your writing
Regards
Travis


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