Hi Ricki.
I like the non regimented lyric. The song sort of floats along nicely and we can imagine more than it actually says.

Arrangement wise it's a fine job by Mike.
The only nit I have is that there seems to be some sort of artefact in the music which may be some sort of delay effect on the drums. Not sure.
To me it's distracting.

All in all it's a good song.

Vic

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