Wow, what a cool rock track! I love hearing these chords that you normally don't run across in rock, along with some nice vocal harmonies to set them off. I feel like I want a lead sheet to this tune just to play through it and take it in (and I feel too lazy to write it out myself). Cool instrumental and vocal break after the first verse and chorus - it felt right.

Like Mike, I definitely hear echoes of the Beatles. I'm reminded of stuff off of Abby Road and Sgt. Pepper like Mr. Mustard and Mr. Kite. If you could find regional bands (in the northern US?) that had the vocal and musical chops to pull it off, I think one would pick it up for rotation into their set.

My only suggestions would be to:

- Flesh out the lyrics to have less repetition in them,
- Be open to having the band alter lyrics, and
- Insert an area of the track that was clearly a space to add a guitar solo on top of.

I would imagine that the solo section could be at 1:37 and just have one chord per bar of D - F - G - D (you've got the first 3 already). Then repeat the 4-bar phrase a few times maybe, to give them the idea where they would place the solo.

Thanks for sharing!