Slim:

Once again, nice work. I liked unklpeet's suggestion--*not* that I think the way you wrote it suggests you went out and killed your family. As far as asking forgiveness, hey, we's all sinners in this here vale of tears--some of us just admit it more readily than others. Whichever way you go is good.

And I do like the "all." It's the musical equivalent of a little catch in the voice, that I've noticed is a fairly common element in old gospel songs. Works well here.

And I *wouldn't* want to join *my* family all at once. I would rather meet them "one by one," like you said. They're nice people, but they're best taken in small doses...

Joe

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