Wendy,

You have a captivating voice. Nice song here, a nice melody and story that that some unfortunately will relate to, but also one that captures anyone that feels compassion for sure. I like the concept of the Ly's for a brief or subtle chorus refrain. Your verse melody here is strong enough with this story that you don't need a lifting full chorus for sure.

One little thought--I was wondering if when you said "Jesus did not whisper," if maybe you said "to her," or "but she did not hear Him whisper?" -- which might make that line feel more about "just her," as she wants to hear Him? I'm not sure that it needs changed, and I like the concept you have--just something for you to consider as an option.

Poignant grassroots write here! I also like with this song the idea of having "no" harmonies and keeping this vocal singular/heartbreaking, as it accentuates the pain and hopelessness that these lyrics evoke. Your "sweet" voice makes a great contrast to the pain of this song--which is one reason why this song hit's you in the gut.

steady-eddie.