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Deej, I've got nothing to offer as far as production but it's a cool g/v.
You don't seemed to be asking for suggestions on the lyrics but I'm throwing this out there anyway. I think the first chorus works well so I'd repeat that instead of having two different ones. I'm not even sure what this means?
You hide too long in the dark
and your true colors will show
As for the bridge, it's not really saying anything new and feels way too long. You even repeat your hook twice more. What if you used part of that second chorus as a bridge?
if you want my heart,
you’ve got to tell me so
Is this a stop or start
Is this a “yes” or “no”
Just a few unsolicited ideas. I enjoyed my listen overall.
Ricki
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