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Breakin’ My Mama’s Rules@2011 Hopkins/Sosnowski
 
Verse 1

Mama always taught us kids the Golden Rule 
Do well unto others, it’ll get you through 
She’d go down the list, every now and then
Say what she expected….thought I was listenin'
 
Verse 2
 
My teen years put her patience to the test 
A stubborn kid, I  knew what worked the best 
At seventeen I just walked away 
Still remember how she looked at me that day….
when I was…
 
Chorus:
 
Standin’ in the driveway… with my suitcase in my hand 
Nothin’ that I’d say…. Could make her understand  
Leavin’ her behind and leavin’ school 
Her heart was Breakin’…..while I was Breakin’… 
Breakin’ My  Mama’s Rules
 
Verse 3:
 
Out in the big bad world , with my beliefs 
No one even noticed me out on the streets 
Thoughts of home's the only thing that got me through
I spent cold nights just thinking’ of 1982 
When I was….
 
Chorus

Standin’ in the driveway… with my suitcase in my hand
Nothin’ that I’d say…. Could make her understand
Leavin’ her behind and leavin’ school
Her heart was Breakin’…..while I was Breakin’…
Breakin’ My  Mama’s Rules
 
 
Bridge:
 
When I called my Mama…..she asked…when ya’ comin’ home
Twenty one and thinkin’ bout the kind of love she’d shown
I prayed…..Take me down the road to where her simple rules began 
Life sure isn’t like…. I…. planned…… 
When I was…..
 
  Chorus

Standin’ in the driveway… with my suitcase in my hand
Nothin’ that I’d say…. Could make her understand
Leavin’ her behind and leavin’ school
Her heart was Breakin’…..while I was Breakin’…
Breakin’ My  Mama’s Rules
 
 
 

Hey you two,

This is nice! I love the way the verses lead into the chorus yet evolve throughout. Very nice write, I look forward to hearing it.

Dottie

Hi Jan and Roger!

Well, I would definitely say that you two have captured the essence of the typical teenage attitude! Very nice lyric and I don't have any nits with this one. Well done!

Heather

Dottie...thanks so much for checking this one out. We do have a melody in mind, so hopefully soon you will be able to hear it.

We're so glad that the verses seem to be transitioning well into the chorus....very glad to hear that.

We always appreciate your time and comments, Dottie.

Jan

Well....I have raised a few teen-agers and I know a whole lot of them right now, as well. Thanks for thinking that we captured the rebelliousness and head strong ideas they sometimes have.

We were really trying to show that coming back to your beginnings is usually a healing sort of thing. Happens to all of us, I guess.

Thanks so much for reading this one over for us, Heather. It is always appreciated so much.

Jan

Hi Roger,

Mama always taught us kids the Golden Rule 
Do GOOD unto others, it’ll get you through  ("do well to others" is grammatically incorrect)
She’d go down HER list, every now and then (She had a list she'd go down)
SAID what WAS expected…. AND thought I was listenin'
 
Verse 2
 
My teen years put her patience to the test 
A stubborn kid, I  knew what worked the best 
At seventeen I just walked away 
Still remember how she looked at me that day….
when I was…
 
REVISED CHORUS
Breakin’ My  Mama’s Rules 
Leavin’ her behind and leavin’ school 
Standin’ in the driveway… with my suitcase in my hand 
Her heart was Breakin’…. COULDN'T make her understand  
BREAKIN MAMA'S RULES


Original chorus
Standin’ in the driveway… with my suitcase in my hand
Nothin’ that I’d say…. Could make her understand
Leavin’ her behind and leavin’ school
Her heart was Breakin’…..while I was Breakin’…
Breakin’ My Mama’s Rules

TT

YOUALL--

Good solid LYRIC--I think one thing that is missing in the BR--MAMA HAD A RULE: YOU CAN ALWAYS COME BACK HOME--EVEN AFTER YOU'RE GROWN--or to the SUMMATION of that..

Good Luck with this one on MUSICATING!

WRITE ON--

Mackie

Hi Dottie,

thanks for listenin and the kind words. i'm glad you liked it. Your input is important to us. take care,
Roger

Hi Heather,

Thanks for the kind words. I'm glad it worked for you. your input is important to us for sure. Take care,
Roger

Hi Terry....thanks so much for giving this a read and offering some good suggestions, but the thing is....we do have a melody for this one in the making that seems to be working, so that your current suggs. would be fine, but wouldn't meter at all with the way that I am singing and playing it. Of course, you didn't know that it is about ready to go to the song stage. We really appreciate that you took the time to read it over for us though...we really do.

Jan

Hi there Mackie....thanks so much for getting us thinking on that bridge....it did make me go....hmmmmmm. We so appreciate you weighing in on this work in progress.

Jan

HiDee Sis & Ski!

Well-Chosen Words of Wisdom...heh! Lemmie Mess Wit 'Em, KOS:

V1:
Mom taught us kids The Golden Rule
"Do Well to Others", It'll get you through
She'd go down her list, every now-&-then
All Her Expectations.."WAS I LISTENIN'?"...&

V2:
My Teen Years put her to the test
As a Stubborn Kid, I knew what-worked-best
Seventeen..said "I'm gonna walk-away"
Can't forget how she looked at me that day..

(CH)
I was Standin' In The Driveway..Suitcase in my hand
Told her I was leavin' 'cuz I had bigger plans
Leavin' her behind, (&) also leavin' school
Her heart was achin' while I was breakin'
Breakin' Mama's Rules--

Well, the Big World was Crueller than I'd believed
I was just another kid with a cardboard sign..on the streets
Thoughts of home were all that pulled me through
Winter-after-Winter since 1982...

(CH) I remembered...(etc)

Your Bridge is Mightyfine.

Like your Original Chorus..with the "Her heart was achin'" on the way out. KOS..it was fun tryin'...

Good Luck with a Good'n' Gang!
Best Wishes & Big Hugs,
Stan

Stan....thanks as always for giving this your time and for once again, giving us some great suggestions to wrap our heads around.

You are always a great help....and we are glad that you liked the bridge.

We sure appreciate it, my sunnystate, friend.

Jan

I will give the thumbs up for this Janice and Roger.

Nice story and tild well.

My only nit would be the line

'Do well unto others, it’ll get you through'

The saying is

'Do unto others, it’ll get you through'

I think most would understand the meaning is to do with the actual saying

'Do unto others, as you would have done unto you. which means that

'Do unto others', implys a good deed anyway.

Maybe I being tooo hard here. I like it fine.

God Bless Roy and Helen

Hi Roger and Jan,

Good song! we all have our differences of how we hear it, here's my quicky, something like this thoughs-- personal preference. Keep anything that helps!


Verse 1

Mama always taught us the Golden Rule
Do unto others, will get you through
When she went down her list of expectation
I heard her words occasionally really listened

Verse 2

My youth put mama's patience to the test
I was a stubborn kid, who knew what was best
At seventeen I took to the street
I can't forget the looked when she saw me….


Chorus:

Standin’ in the driveway… suitcase in hand
Nothin’ I could say would make her make her understand
She had hopes and plans, I was leavin’ school
Her heart was Breakin’…..while I was Breakin’…
Breakin’ Mama’s Rules

Verse 3:

Here in this big bad world , mama's my relief
No one even notices me hungry on these streets
Thoughts of home's the thing that get's me by
I think back to "82" on these cold nights, when I


Chorus

Stood in the driveway… suitcase in hand
Nothin’ I could say would make her make her understand
She had hopes and plans, I was leavin’ school
Her heart was Breakin’…..while I was Breakin’…
Breakin’ Mama’s Rules



Bridge:

When I called Mama…..she asked…when ya’ comin’ home
Love wasn't a question to her boy of twenty-one
I Thanked God I found her simple ways again
Life sure wasn't like…. I…. planned……


Chorus

Standin’ in the driveway… suitcase in hand
Nothin’ I could say would make her make her understand
She had hopes and plans, I was leavin’ school
Her heart was Breakin’…..while I was Breakin’…
Breakin’ Mama’s Rules

Hi Roy...yeah, that line has been a bit of a sticking point with several folks. I think that I was just needing an extra syl there, for the melody that I have been working on for this.....or maybe just trying to twist it and say a bit differently.

I am glad that you gave it a read for us and really appreciate that thumbs up.

Hope all is going well for you.

Jan

Hi Terry,

hey thanks for checking this one out and the sug's. jan and I will take them into consideration for sure. Take care,
roger

A straight-forward message. It is definitely relatable and we've all been there. Some may not be as intense, for example, one may talk back in a disrespectful manner vice running away. The two actions differ, but will cause you to look back and possibly regret the behavior. Nonetheless, it is a part of growing up. So long as we have an opportunity to right our wrongs, helps to lighten the load...

Geneva....thanks for all of the fine suggestions....some may work and some may not, because of the melody that I am hearing with this one. But, you always give us new ways to look at things and we surely appreciate that you take the time to stop by and give us some great help. It is so appreciated...always.

Jan and Roger

Hey Jan and Roger...

It's funny as we grow older our parents wisdom seems to grow with the coming of years.
Nice work.

Larry

Wanted to pay my respects on this collab. The comments/suggestions you have received are great. I have no "nits" what so ever and can see the merit in all the "re-write" from other memebers.

Great Job!

Douglas

Hi You Two,

Another nice, well thought out lyric. Two of my favorite sayings are "I knew it all when I was 16 but I forgot most of it" and "The older I get the wiser my parents were". This song follows them well. Good luck with the musicating.

Hi Sabrinao....we are glad that you weighed in on this lyric...and so happy that you gave us some more insight into those teen, rebellious years. Alot of us can relate....because of our own past behavior or that of our children, at times....to a lesser or greater extent.

We thank you for seeing it as a piece that many may relate to.

Jan

Boy...you've got that right, Larry. Thanks so much for relating to this one. We appreciate that you gave it a read through for us.

Jan

Thanks Doug...Yes, we will be looking intently at all of the suggestions, before we go to a rewrite. My esteemed co-writer is on a business trip to Orlando right now. When he gets back in a few days, please watch for a bit of a rewrite.

Thanks Doug....and also for the encouragement.

Jan

Hi Mackie,

I'm really behind on my comments--works been crazy--well you know the tune. LOl. Hey thanks for checking this one out. Thanks for the idea on the bridge as well--we've received lots of sug's on this one--which are all helpful. Your opinion means a lot to us. Some day soon Jan and I will go over this one again and see what comes of it. take care,
Roger

Janice and Roger,
This is one that I can most definitely relate to.I have three teenagers in the house!!!I dread the day when one of my children decided that its time to leave home...I doubt that I will EVER be ready to let them go...very nice lyric,as always...
Michelle

Hi Stan,

Hey as I said before--I'm way behind on my comments. Thanks for checking this one out and your ideas. Jan and I need to sit down and go over the great sug's that have been brought up. Glad you liked it. Take care,
Roger

Hi Roy,

Thanks for taking time to go over this one. I'm glad you liked it for the most part. As far as the do unto others saying--it was a bit of a play on the words--hoping it's nothing major though. Take care,
Roger

Hi Geneva,

Thanks for spending time to look this one over and leave sug's as well. I'll talk them over with Jan for sure. Glad you liked it. Take care,
Roger

Hi Sabriano,

Thanks forgiving this one a look. Glad you liked it. And you're correct--we have all been there at one time or another. thanks and take care,
Roger

Hi Janice & Roger

I'm very much looking forward to hearing this great song of yours.


Hugs Michele

Hi Michele,

Thanks for giving this one a look. I'm glad you liked it. Take care,
Roger