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I got brave LOL
Not soo much... this one has a copyright
Please tell me what you think.
(ps this is NOT me singing it!)
I write country and pop. This was wriiten for
MTSU's ASCAP sship award.


Always & Forever"
(Valerie Whitlock)
Always & Forever
V1
Why did I believe we could go back
To the days when our love was young and new
Still your eyes make my heart beat faster
And I'll hold on to all the memories
Pre-C
I know that we must let this go
Our loves not meant to be
But first love has a way
Of holding on persistently
Chorus
Always & Forever
I will be... I'll be lovin' you
Had to let it go
It's over yes I know
Still Always & Forever more... I'll be lovin' you

V2
We've moved on
The years have past us by
And now and then
I feel our love begin.. to fade
But all it takes is a moment... just a glance
And I feel all the love come rushing in
(C)
Bridge:
I'm not holding on to the hope
That we'll be together
I know that our forever is long gone
My heart will always hold a place.. just for you
Always & Forever I will
(c)
(©1999)

http://www.soundclick.com/val575

Hi Val,

Welcome to JPF! Thanks for sharing your song with us. Not to rain on your parade but in the future I would post this over on any of the three Lyric Boards (1,2 or 3) and/or over on the Mp3 Board. If you look around you'll see what I mean. There's a great group of people here so I hope you feel at home.

My opinion (and it is only mine) on your song is, hmmmm....let's see. I liked it. I thought it was better melodically over lyrically. I like when a vocalist uses passion and emotion and I think she tried to do this. It had a Toni Braxton kind of feel/sound to it. The title was a very popular hit from years back which can be a negative when pitching but not always a dead end. I felt it could have been just a bit faster w/much more instruments coming into the song probably around your pre-chorus or alittle after. I think with a possible Title change, alittle tweaking and more instruments (a fuller demo) this has potential. The melody is crucial so melodically your on your way.

Take care and hope you stick around.

Best,
Lynn

Thanks for listening Lynn.
I appreciate all of your feedback on my song. The "post here post there" stuff was definitely frustrating at first. I guess it just takes some getting used to. Some people seem to get really upset if a post "doesn't belong." Anyway LOL onto the music.

I do feel that the melody is also the strongest part of my song. I try to invision a video when I write... and I can see it with the lyrics. There was never a re-write on this song, partly because I was so rushed with the deadline (no real excuse) and after it was recorded I moved on. I will see if I can make it a little stonger lyrically and paint a better picture. I want that video to be GOOD!!! LOL

That's another reason I am writing so many country songs these days. I really enjoy the storytelling aspect of country music.

Ok. That's it.
Hope to chat again soon!
Val