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Howdy Kat!
2nd Lift Line'd condense easier-sung to:
"There's one thing I think you should know"
LAST Chorus Line kinda Bleeds Away your Rhyme Scheme, and the "Always in My Heart" line that Initially Worked So Well probably oughta be RE-Hit, JMO...
Last line of 2nd Verse, try:
"You're never..really gone"
Bridge Last Line (on a ROLL Here today..)
"When you're whispering these words" :-)>
The "Bodies Line" in the Chorus...Hmmm...try:
"Even though we're living
maybe Many Miles Apart...."
Keep or Sweep'm, Kat!
Allus Fun Hintin' on The Master's Stuff..heh-heh!
"KUDOS" & Good Luck with it,
Stan
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