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Me, I'll Be There Catching You -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- New song I'm working on with Ken Bennett. Rough version right now. http://guitarsbykb.com/outside/music/Catching%20You%2002%2044100%2024.mp3Me, I'll Be There Catching You © 2012 Kevin Pearson/Ken Bennett (1) You keep my secrets I keep your secrets too Not much to hide One little thing or two Things I don’t mention You never mention them too Every new day We find a day brand new (Ch) And life goes on and on I’m always leaning on you If you should stumble Me, I'll be there catching you (2) Who knows the future Maybe the future knows It’s like the past Look in the glass where it shows In every lifetime There is a lifetime to live You gave me yours And I thank you for your gift (Ch) And life goes on and on I’m always leaning on you If you should stumble Me, I'll be there catching you (Br) Tomorrow we'll argue about this long hair on my chin… again I'll stand my ground and say Let it grow one more day Just before you smile and while I give in (Ch) Life goes on and on I’m always leaning on you If you should stumble Me, I'll be there catching you __________________ TuneSpace MySpace Guitars by KB Custom Electric Guitars Guitar Inlays Acoustic Archtop Guitar
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Howdy Kevin. Pretty song. Might want to raise the tempo slightly IMO. I also noticed when just reading the lyric that you rely on rhyming the oooh sound a bunch to the extent that you're ryhming you with you, too and two, etc. Admittedly it works better when listening but IMO you could improve the lyric in that arena if you choose to re-write anything. There are lots of words that have the oooh sound for an end rhyme so you shouldn't have trouble there. It just makes it sound like you were reaching for end rhymes. Anyway, just my two cents worth. Like I said, it's a very pretty song in an old fashioned sense which is not a bad thing at all.
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Stevie,
Thanks for listening. Yes it is rhymed pretty heavy and we may change up the bridge too, I thought it was worth sharing now though cause I do like where it's at right and it's something a little bit different.
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Hi Kevin. Nice little ditty, a cross between “My Sweet Lord” and CSN’s “Our House”. I enjoyed the music and the sediments. My only nit would be your rhyming. Rhyming two with too and then the next verse you use too again rhyming it with new. It’s hard, sometimes, cause the music you hear in your head that is speaking to you flows with those words so well. You rhyme you with you in the chorus as well. Again, no big deal unless you’re gonna pitch it or something, and then you should consider a re-write.
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Hi Guys
I like where you are going with this one. Kevin, you can hammer out the sameness as you are a very inventive writer -- I had a couple of lyrical thoughts -- but figure so do you : )
My other comment would be that the music of the bridge feels similar to the rest at the start -- so maybe a lift or punch in that area also.
Good overall work and song
jm
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Love the hook line on this, Kevin. And I dig the chord progression too in the verses and chorus. Maybe the bridge could be changed up a little more....
Agree with the others on rhyming too and two, you and you. I mean it works OK but I think you can give it more impact if you rhyme different words.
Sounds like I'm down on this but I actually like it very much and think it has a lot of potential. The musical treatment sounds contemporary but has some classic elements. In my opinion, that is the exact thing to shoot for: oddly familiar but fresh sounding.
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Hi Kevin,
I think you are getting some good feedback above. I really like the sentimental feel of this. I agree with the rhyming comments from above, but that said, you really do have some excellent lines in here.
The little chord change that leads into the chorus is perfect.
Mike D.
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Thanks to all for listening and commenting. Not sure where we will go from here but I appreciate everyones input.
Kevin
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I like your sound. Its a little unique. I would agree with everyone and tell you to consider re-write parts of the first verse, but everything else is very nice. You are a good quitarist.
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Hey Kevin and Ken, I agree with the rhyme issues.
I like the music and the overall meaning of the song, but [color:#FF0000]1:18 is too long for me to wait for the hook line. I believe you could tighten the music to get there quicker. This would also reduce the overall length of the song. Nearly 5 minutes can work for an artist-written song, but outside writers should keep it between three and four.[/color]
“I usually start with a title or maybe a little rhyme or phrase.” - Harlan Howard
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Faith and Shayne,
Thanks for listening. Ken Bennett is on guitar and vocals.
Kevin
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