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Hi guys and girls, been awhile... been stuck behind this yellow bus forever, ended up doing a consultation with Bill Renfrew, well several actually. I drove him crazy with this song, lol.. He worked as hard as I did on it and earned a co-write. I would recommend his service to anyone, just leave your ego at the door  http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_songInfo.cfm?bandID=100639&songID=10715791
http://www.soundclick.com/louistwinn"If a man does not keep pace with his companions, perhaps it is because he hears a different drummer. Let him step to the music which he hears, however measured or far away." Thoreau
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hi, i like it,tells a nice story and flows along easy. good song. like your voice on this too.
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Thanks dmk
http://www.soundclick.com/louistwinn"If a man does not keep pace with his companions, perhaps it is because he hears a different drummer. Let him step to the music which he hears, however measured or far away." Thoreau
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Another great song from Louis, but what else would we expect? You're great Louis..love this one alot..great song, great story, wonderful vocals on this...
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Well, I think this is a concept/idea that deserved a lot of work, sweat and toil. It was great from day one and as it has evolved, it has changed focus and story lines -- but it has always been fascinating.
I am glad that it is you and not me who is deciding what to throw out and what to keep in -- every single version has been a keeper in my opinion.
Kevin
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Hi Glyn, thanks Kevin, yeah man this has been a roller coaster ride with the story-line...
http://www.soundclick.com/louistwinn"If a man does not keep pace with his companions, perhaps it is because he hears a different drummer. Let him step to the music which he hears, however measured or far away." Thoreau
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Louis,
I was missing you sir!! So happy to see you again!!
I think I have liked all of the versions of this song and always love to hear you play and sing.
This write is very nice.
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Hey thanks Tammy, school's out now. I can quit getting stuck behind a bus...
http://www.soundclick.com/louistwinn"If a man does not keep pace with his companions, perhaps it is because he hears a different drummer. Let him step to the music which he hears, however measured or far away." Thoreau
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Hey I liked this! Good words, good storyline flow and if I had to suggest anything at all, I would have liked to see one (just one) transition line added or substituted between the first verse (STUCK behind the bus) and the second (where they were Jesse James and G.I Joe, etc., and riding IN the bus) so that we could first be put into the bus to better understand the scene of them in it as kids. Then the line about them riding in their yellow limousine would have fit in more smoothly.
But that's just a little thing, nice song!
Best Regards and Aloha,
Charlie
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Hi Louis, really great acoustic track. Would have loved to read the lyrics too.
Love your country voice!
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Hi Louis, good work indeed Bill's very good at this stuff. I worked with him on 2 songs; for one reason or another, he doesn't answer my emails any more. Seems like he bears me a grudge or something, can't see why for the life of me  But I appreciated working with him. If you could decide him to explain me why he doesn't seem to like me any more, LOL ... He doesn't say a song is finished unless it's finished and that's a great thing. Yours is ready Hope you have a great day, Yann
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Hi Louis, I really like this, man it takes me back, way way back lol. What a cool song that brought back fun memories! Dottie
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Thanks Charlie Thanks Dave Hi Yann, I haven't heard from him in a few weeks now. I know he's super busy though. I'm sure he likes you Thanks Dottie, yep fun times for sure.
http://www.soundclick.com/louistwinn"If a man does not keep pace with his companions, perhaps it is because he hears a different drummer. Let him step to the music which he hears, however measured or far away." Thoreau
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Look what the cat dragged in!  You already know I like this version I'm like Kevin - I thought each version was good and probably would have called it done. But I think this one is the strongest. LOL - you're not making it easy for those of us who struggle over deciding whether a song is done or not Good to see you back! Scott
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Good to see you back here , Louis :-)
I really like the words and performance . It`s so Louis :-)
Keep up the good work !!!
All the best
Jan
"You have to react to what's around you in the moment, whatever the music is.
Just think of it as some place you have to enter and you need to find the key."
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Hi Scott, the cat chewed me up a bit before he drug me in, lol...
Thanks Jan, was hoping it was so Alan Jackson, lol..
http://www.soundclick.com/louistwinn"If a man does not keep pace with his companions, perhaps it is because he hears a different drummer. Let him step to the music which he hears, however measured or far away." Thoreau
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Hi Louis Golly gosh, were you been hah, we've missed you around here. I always love listening to your songs, I love your voice.  I never rode in a yellow bus, our school bus was red, love what you've done, thoroughly enjoyed my listen, and thanks for reminding me of the good times I had in my child hood. "Koala Bear Hug" Michele
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Thanks Michele, just change the lyrics to "riding on that Big Red Bus"
http://www.soundclick.com/louistwinn"If a man does not keep pace with his companions, perhaps it is because he hears a different drummer. Let him step to the music which he hears, however measured or far away." Thoreau
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Hi Louis and Bill, So glad to see you posting again and that you made it safely through that tornado  that came too close for comfort (Scott kept us up to date)!!! I remember this song from before and remember taking a shine to it, but I would love to see the lyrics if possible. I walked to grade and high school, but for so many alot of time can be spent on those yellow buses creating alot of memories. Interesting how you started the story with being stuck behind one prompting the walk down memory lane. Nice cowrite. Best, Lynn
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Hi Lynn, rode the bus for awhile, then moved to town, so I rode my bike or walked most the time the lyrics are on the same page as the mp3, the link's at the top.
http://www.soundclick.com/louistwinn"If a man does not keep pace with his companions, perhaps it is because he hears a different drummer. Let him step to the music which he hears, however measured or far away." Thoreau
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Great to see ya Louis Very nice write. A simple fix on a few phrases would really tighten this up. Nice to have you back
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Thanks Mike, ok, now you got to tell me which ones..
http://www.soundclick.com/louistwinn"If a man does not keep pace with his companions, perhaps it is because he hears a different drummer. Let him step to the music which he hears, however measured or far away." Thoreau
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Louis, always enjoy your writing, keep up the good work, LOVE the subject matter here, it's the stuff hits are made of, a little tighten up here or there and who knows...good to see ya...be well...moker
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I can relate to this Louis, nice job.
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Louis,
Wonderful story! You told it in a very conversational way that made it easy to listen to and quit memorable. Thanks for sharing.
Tom W.
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Hi Moker, long time no see.. thanks man, yeah the world needs a "bus" song. Thanks Scott Appreciate that Tom
http://www.soundclick.com/louistwinn"If a man does not keep pace with his companions, perhaps it is because he hears a different drummer. Let him step to the music which he hears, however measured or far away." Thoreau
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