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I’m Crazy For You Baby By: Patty Whitehead
Doesn’t matter how hard I try Your face won’t escape my mind All you do and all you say I remember and replay Like the look you gave me the other night The time that you told me that I looked real nice And the way you hug me oh so tight I remember it all because
I’m crazy for you baby You’re all I think of lately My heart starts racin’ Whenever I see you Cuz I’m crazy for you baby Won’t you come and take me To a place where it can be Just me and you
I see you walkin by And the thoughts start racin’ through my mind I know that I want you But do you want me too? Do you think of me when you sleep at night? Do you ever get nervous when I’m in sight? Do these same thoughts ever cross your mind? And inside are you thinking
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I’m so crazy for you baby I’m so crazy for you baby I’m so crazy for you baby I’m so, I’m so, I’m crazy baby When I see you I get chills up my spine Whenever were together I can’t think right When will I tell you how I feel inside And finally let you know that
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Works fine Patty.... like the change and the way it works back into the chorus....
and this is nice and simple, and all so pivotal....captures much of this...
All you do and all you say I remember and replay
bd (thumbs up)
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Is this intended for the market? If not, ignore the following critique: Publishers and artists are so picky these days when choosing material to record. If it remotely resembles a previous hit, they will often pass. Nothing that I read here strikes me as unique; all has been said before in much the same ways.. Not trying to be cruel; just honest. JMO FWIW ------------------ http://shayneman.proboards19.com/
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I sometimes wonder what percentage of pop, rock & country songs have the word "baby" in them.
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Believe that you captured your singers thoughts and feelings but will agree with SV and say that what you have is good but not unique. I would take another look at see how you can say the same thing in a love song but differently.
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At the end of the day, it's the music that will carry any lyric, so while I agree with SV and Douglas that the lyrics by themselves are not distinctive, perhaps you have melody and sound in mind that makes this work. I do think there is some unnecessary repetition in some of the lines--e.g., "start rac'ing" in the first chorus and second verse. And I'm a little unclear how the third verse works with the chorus--but again impossible to judge without the sound behind it. I'll trust the sound you have behind it works. Nice job, keep posting.
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