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How Are Things In Heaven ,So Far ? © 2005 Claire J. Coburn, BMI All Rights Reserved "NEW VERSION ,BELOW,AMANDA'S POSTS V1 OLD VERSION Even though you knew I cared You were longing to be there You left in a hurry Told me not to worry Time to go, God ‘s callin’ You left whisperin’ “ I love you my darlin' Darlin'how are things in heaven? Are you singin’? And playing your guitar ? Is everybody up there smilin’? How are things in heaven so far? V2 I can see you in my mind A movie of good times Starts playin’ every night. Then I see a Bright Light You’re all dressed in white Beaming in God’s Great Light. BR Someday we'll be there together You won't only be a picture - In my mind . The day you left me behind You had been sick for a very long time That's when the Lord ,came callin'. CH Darlin'how are things in heaven'? Are you singin’? And playing your guitar? Is everybody up there smilin’? How are things in heaven ,so far? ------------------ God Bless, Claire. http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandid=19086 [This message has been edited by clairejeanne (edited 12-29-2005).] [This message has been edited by clairejeanne (edited 12-29-2005).] [This message has been edited by clairejeanne (edited 12-29-2005).]
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This song isn't far away from perfect.
Do not say Darlin' twice.
Do not say playin' twice.
Do not use the word light twice.
Do not use the word sick twice.
Do not use movie twice.
See below . . .
How Are Things In Heaven, So Far?
© 2005 Claire J. Coburn, BMI
All Rights Reserved
V1
Even though you knew I cared
You were longing [hoping is a sweeter and more positive word] to be there
You left in a hurry
Told me not to worry
Time to go, God‘s callin’
You left whisperin’,
“I love you, My Darlin'"
[Darlin']
Honey,
How are things in Heaven?
Are you singin’?
And strummin [playin'] your guitar?
Is everybody up there smilin’?
How are things in Heaven so far?
V2
I can see you in my mind
A movie of good times
Starts playin’ every night.
Then I see a pretty sight
[Bright Light delete or change]
You’re all dressed in white
Beaming in God’s Great Light.
BR
Someday, we may be there together
You won't be just a picture in my mind.
When the Lord came callin' you home.
You didn't want to see me left behind.
CH
So Honey, How are things in heaven'?
Are you singin'?
And strummin' your guitar?
Is everybody up there smilin’?
How are things in Heaven so far?
CODA
How are things in Heaven so far!?
[This message has been edited by BigAppleLyricist (edited 12-29-2005).]
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Thanks ,appreciate the suggestions....I will use just about ,most of them .
Claire
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I certainly do ,Amanda. HERE IS THE NEW VERSION USING MOST OF YOUR SUGGESTIONS.THANKS. How Are Things In Heaven ,So Far ? © 2005 Claire J. Coburn, BMI All Rights Reserved V1 You were longing to be there Athough you knew I cared. I was fallen’ apart. You left in a hurry Told me not to worry Time to go, God ‘s callin’ You left whisperin’ “ I love you darlin’ CH Honey how are things in heaven? Are you singin’? And strumming your guitar Is everybody up there smilin’? How are things in heaven ,so far? V2 I can see you in my mind A movie of good times Starts playin’ every night. I look up at the stars Thinking you ‘re not that far I see you dressed in white You’re a lovely sight Beaming in God’s Light. BR Someday we’ll be there together You won’t be just, a picture in my mind When the Lord ,called you home I was left here all alone. But someday we’ll be , Together.,forever CH Honey how are things in heaven? Are you singin’ And strumming your guitar? Is everybody up there smilin’? How are things in heaven so far? ------------------ God Bless, Claire. http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandid=19086
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I just sang it and it sang beautifully.
Now buy a copy of the Songwriter's Market and sell it.
Fix the punctuation.
I think the title is actually, "How Are Things in Heaven?" [You don't need "so far" in the title.]
First get a demo, and have it copywritten with a lead sheet [melody line and chords] or sheet music. Register it at BMI.
DO NOT IGNORE THIS ADVICE.
If someone tries to "steal" a song - THEY will have a lead sheet, and you shouldn't just have a piece of paper with some dumb numbers on it.
The Songwriter's Market is under $20.
"How Are Things In Heaven?"
© 2005 Claire J. Coburn, BMI
All Rights Reserved
V1
You were longing to be there
Athough you knew I cared.
I was fallen’ apart.
You left in a hurry,
Told me not to worry
Time to go, God‘s callin’
You left whisperin’
“I love you, Darlin’"
CH
Honey, How Are Things in Heaven?
Are you singin’?
And strumming your guitar?
Is everybody up there smilin’?
How are Things in Heaven so far?
V2
I can see you in my mind
A movie of good times
Starts playin’ every night.
I look up at the stars
Thinking you're not that far
I see you dressed in white
You’re a lovely sight
Beaming in God’s Light.
BR
Someday we’ll be there together
You won’t be just - a picture in my mind
When the Lord called you home,
I was left here all alone.
But someday we’ll be
Together . . . forever.
CH
Honey, How are Things in Heaven?
Are you singin’
And strumming your guitar?
Is everybody up there smilin’?
How are Things in Heaven so far?
[This message has been edited by BigAppleLyricist (edited 12-29-2005).]
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Thanks again Amanda.I do appreciate you . I have a SongWriter's Market .I've sent songs out ,quite a few times. I hope this one makes it..... Claire ------------------ God Bless, Claire. http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandid=19086
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Really nice Claire!
I agree with Amanda. Nicely written. (I appreciate her too)Let us know how this turns out!
Tony
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Thanks Tony. And I appreciate everyone who helps me.
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And while the 'preciations are are flying about like confetti at a Dick Clark bash, I
wanna say, I 'preciate this lyric (especially the latest incarnation ['mander]), and look forward to hearing it. This is a good ol' timey eye-damp'ner, CJ!
ben
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Great song great meaning but I like the so far part to leave it out would change the meaning of the song.
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Hi Chris, I'm keeping the title ....How Are Things In Heaven ,so Far.....It makes it unique. Thanks for stopping by & commenting . Have a blessed New Year. Claire ------------------ God Bless, Claire. http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandid=19086
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