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This song came to me on a flight to New York. The request came to put phones into airplane mode and I had to stop texting. Somehow it got me thinking about not being able to get calls or texts for a while and how that's not always a bad thing. One thought led to another and, since I couldn't call or text anyway, I put my phone to better use and typed out this lyric. By the time we landed, it was done and I had a melody playing in my head. It's a work in progress, so all comments and suggestions appreciated as always. https://on.soundcloud.com/r1ykEDON’T CALL ME(Words & Music by Gavin Sinclair) (iPhone incoming call sound) [Spoken] Hello. What, you again? What have I told you? For crying out loud...Don’t call me, I don’t want to hear from you Text me and I won’t reply Don’t send me no carrier pigeon I’ll shoot the little bastard right out of the sky Email me, I’ll just delete it. For God’s sake don’t turn up at my door. The only message I got for you, baby, Is I don’t love you any more. I don’t love you any more I used to before you tore My heart apart and it’s still sore And I don’t love you any more Sky writing doesn’t impress me Postcards go straight in the trash Smoke signals - I’ll call the fire department To hose down your sorry ass. Write me a poem about how much you miss me Yawn, what a terrible bore What lamentably amateur iambic pentameter! I don’t love you any more I don’t love you any more I used to before you tore My heart apart and it’s still sore And I don’t love you any more So don’t call me, text me, Facebook friend me Ticktock or Instagram saying let’s meet. Morse code, semaphore, they’ll just offend me Stop shouting at me in the street You wouldn’t be my honey when I had no money Now you say you think I’m great Well, you didn’t think a lot of me till I went and won the lottery Sorry baby, it’s too late I don’t love you any more I used to before you tore My heart apart and it’s still sore And I don’t love you any more INSTRUMENTAL BREAK I don’t love you any more I used to before you tore My heart apart and it’s still sore And I don’t love you any more [Spoken] Let's see now. Blocked caller - that should do it.(WhatsApp tone) Aw F...she's on WhatsApp now!
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Hmmmmn... Who's this guy trying to convince?  Smart lyric as usual... Like the swing beat!
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Hey Gavin : I could hear this in a sync placement in a movie . it's really catchy , cool horns . it swings sweetly right along https://www.musicopps.com/search/label/Film
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Hmmmmn... Who's this guy trying to convince? Smart lyric as usual... Like the swing beat! I wrote one like that a while ago about someone trying to convince himself. I think this guy is pretty sure about it LOL.
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Thank Ben. I think I might have to get rid of that ring tone at the beginning. Anyone listening on their phone is going to think they really have a call coming in 
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Maybe : They do that on songs Gavin , not much , but some on rain ect ect ect.
Actually... I did think my phone was ringing , maybe dump it.
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Don't dump it, but don't answer it either lol... REACT to it while it's ringing.
"OMG! Even my ringtone has attitude when this bitch calls!"
"Well, this should be fukn' interesting..."
"$H!T... I can delete her from my phone but not from my life..."
"No amount of Viagra can overcome the sound of this kunt's voice!"
"Hmmmmn... kill her or change my number? Decisions, decisions..."
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Ha Ha Ha
Well if it's for Youtube , You have watch out on all that
Advertisers and monetization frown on vulgarity
But that is funny Tony
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I'm sure Gav can put his usual "politically generic" spin on it... Hell, he could make all that sound like a compliment 
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"She's made the name Amanda an antidote for Viagra..."
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I like all those ideas, bit I do see a couple of problems. Firstly, he's talking to her, which makes more sense if he actually answers the phone. Secondly, and maybe not as importantly, all those mean things he says make more sense once you've heard the song than they do at the beginning.
I appreciate the suggestions. As I said, it's a work in progress, and I'm still making changes.
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I don't think you need the profanity to make this fly Gavin , and Youtube will be mad and could shut you down.
Unless you did not throw monetization on the vid, even then, they watch.
Its a cute song as is.
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I agree about the profanity, Ben. Even describing the pigeon as a "little bastard" is on the edge, although it seems to convey the attitude better than "little fella" or some such generic term.
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little bastard" is on the edge, Hard to say with Youtube , ultra sensitive on about everything as you know probably
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OK, so I weighed up the suggestions and my own misgivings and decided (at least for now) to keep the iPhone sound at the beginning, but shorten it and start the first beat of the musical intro on the last beat of the ring tone instead of waiting until the end of the spoken part. I think that works better. I also changed the end to add a little bit of a twist. I think it works better and gets the message across without the need for profanity. Thanks for the input, guys. https://soundcloud.com/themysteriousbeings/dont-call-me
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Just a bit too much reverb on the VOX... Still a cute song
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You might be right about the reverb, Tony. I'll play around with it when I get a chance. Thanks for the input.
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I still thought my phone was ringing Gavin
but its a cute song my man
If you don't put monetization on vids , you can say anything you want Gavin
Rap is vulgar as hell , they have vids
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