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It's hard to get across an inner dialog but Mike Zaneski came as close as possible without actually being inside my head, which is no place a sane person would willingly want to be.  All suggestions and comments are welcome. Thanks for listening. Ricki https://soundcloud.com/rickibLOST GIRL I’ve got this problem, this…friend I want to help cause she’s sufferin’ She laughs too loud, drinks too much The parties are never enough Naively gives her heart away Feels empty by the light of day It’s no fun anymore Waking up on a dirty floor All the shadow people she knows Just laugh and say let it go She holds her dreams in her head Rewinds and plays them again…like a Lost girl Hiding inside her should have dones A lost girl Broken but fixable A lost girl This is not who she wants to be A lost girl So I declare, “You’re beautiful With qualities irrefutable” I laugh at my fifty-cent words That escape my mouth like nervous birds And warn this next reveal might hurt Unsure if it’s what she deserves What’s exposed in the mirror Will cost as it gets clearer Don’t want to bruise that shining soul How do I tell her what I know One in a million can’t she see That lonely girl is all me…I’m a Lost girl Hiding inside my should have dones A lost girl Broken but fixable A lost girl This is not who I want to be A lost girl © Ricki E. Bellos (BMI)
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Ricki (and Mike),
This is EXCEPTIONAL.
A wonderful write. If I quoted my favorite lines, it would be the entire song.
The production is exquisite. The echoes are awesome (that had to take some work...). Every other part of it, too...
This is one of the best things I've ever heard on this board.
A BIG WOW!!! (to you both).
fj
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You two are "plowing new ground" with this gem of a song, Ricki. Enjoyed my listen. ----Dave
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Great stuff. Congrats Ricki and Michael. Great lyric. It has kind of a psychedelic 60’s vibe - a little Lulu meets the Lovin’ Spoonful. Loved it. Awesome job. I knew immediately the “friend” was really the 1st person singer. Rather than being sure, let’s say I had a feeling. Great write.
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Hi Ricki...I was only able to listen on my phone but the song, vocal and production were wonderful. It's really well done.
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Beautiful song Ricki (and Mike).That guy consistantly helps turn out great songs!)
I'm a big fan of Fairport Convention and i could hear Sandy Denny in this Ricki.
Best of luck with it
Regards
Travis
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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A big WOW backatcha, Floyd! Thanks for all the warm fuzzies. The echo factor was essential to the song and Mike was able to make them work just like I heard them in my head, without having to actually go there! Thanks for listening. Ricki
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Thanks, Dave, glad you enjoyed it.
Ricki
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Thanks for tuning in, Mike.
Ricki
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Hi Other Dave! Speaking of psychedelic...another listener wasn't sure if she was high or if I was when I wrote it!  Yeah, anytime you hear, "I've got this friend..." it's a dead giveaway. Thanks and glad you got it and liked it. Ricki
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Thanks, Rob, glad you were able to listen at all and that you liked what you heard.
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That's a big compliment, Travis. Mike brings out the heart and soul of every song he touches...lucky me! Ricki
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Thanks for checking it out, Calvin.
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Ricki,
Gosh that was a great listen! You deserve all the accolades that have come your way. Inspired writing, inspired arranging and a truly outstanding production by Mike.
I was mesmerised for the whole journey... captured by that wonderful melody and those vocals bouncing around hither and thither!
Wow!
All the best,
Noel
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Stunningly well done. The high bar production and vocals support the fine write very nicely.
Y'all done good!!
J&B
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Nice little song...with a little surprise at the end.
Thoughtful lyrics.
Doug
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Thanks so much for listening and commenting, Noel. Glad you liked it.
Ricki
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Hey J&B, thanks for the stunning review. Glad you enjoyed it.
Ricki
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Thanks for listening, Doug. Glad you caught the surprise ending. Ricki
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Ricki
If I was to criticize the song, the criticism would be that the song was too thoughtful. And that level of thoughfulness was lost on most listeners. Personally, I enjoyed it a lot.
Musically for me, it recalled Mama Cass and that era.
Question; What is your meaning for "shadow people," I had two guesses and couldn't help be curious.
Martin
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Martin, can a song be too thoughtful? I'm glad you enjoyed it. "Shadow people" are what I think of as acquaintances, false friends, thoughtless people who can fill up our lives if we aren't discerning enough to weed them out from true friends. They aren't "bad" necessarily, just don't have our best interests at heart. I wasn't trying to be mysterious. Thanks for listening. Ricki
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Martin, can a song be too thoughtful? I'm glad you enjoyed it. "Shadow people" are what I think of as acquaintances, false friends, thoughtless people who can fill up our lives if we aren't discerning enough to weed them out from true friends. They aren't "bad" necessarily, just don't have our best interests at heart. I wasn't trying to be mysterious. Thanks for listening. Ricki That was my guess as to what "shadow people" meant but wanted to ask. The term is appealing and relatable. So is your explanation. Martin
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Yes, certainly a touch of Mama Cass, Ricki.
Excellent lyric. The only crit I have is that (at least for my ears) the echo in places is a little too much and sounds muddled with the vocal.
Good one otherwise.
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Ricki,
Gosh, really like this one, Ricki—particularly the change in rhythm in the middle of the verses and choruses. Beautifully written. And a pretty vocal all the way through. Don’t disagree with Vic that some of the echo could be dialed back just a tad—a slight bit too much with the headphones on. Just something to think about. Great, great tune!
Kind regards,
Deej
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Vic, I was going for a bit of internal chaos...too much you think? I'll have to think about that. Thanks for listening.
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Glad you liked it, Deej...comment noted. Thanks for tuning in.
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Very nice work, you guys...
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Thanks for listening, Malin.
Ricki
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