Thanks Gavin

While it's not pleasant to have aspects of a song criticized, I can handle that without getting defensive, aggressive or personal - as I think my earlier post indicates.

Where I did get my back up was his notion "every song you write deserves your best effort" implying that I didn't try hard enough or keep at it long enough. I've re-read his posts and I still feel he was patronizing.

I like your comments about the lyric wandering but I would describe it as a non-linear lyric. For decades non-linear lyrics have coexisted with story line lyrics and lyrics focused on a single person. Some of my favorite popular songs are non-linear. Having said that, it's very possible that my lyrics won't sit well with listeners who do enjoy popular non-linear songs.

That's an excellent suggestion for transitioning to the chorus. I'm playing the song at my first songwriters circle next Sunday. I'll incorporate your approach into my rehearsal process this week.

Mike


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