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by bennash - 06/07/26 09:34 PM
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by Gary E. Andrews - 06/05/26 04:07 PM
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inspired by my beautiful daughter, Stephanie, 18 soon and just full of beans.
surprised by how this song is so right on about her. came easily enough.
that being said I would still look forward to any suggestions/comments.
have a great week.
douglas
She Makes Me....
[08.04.2012]
(V)
she makes me laugh. she makes me giggle.
makes me dance and jump around.
she makes me jiggle.
she makes me smile throughout the day.
she makes me laugh.
that is her way.
(V)
she entertains. she's in her glory.
when she talks about her day
and tells her stories.
she makes me smile. so glad she's here.
she makes me laugh
throughout the year.
(C)
that blessing took the guise
of a young girl overly shy.
who outside of the home spoke not a word.
the cutest little thing who
would often dance and sing.
who now is always seen and always heard.
(V)
she's growin' up to fast before me.
in subtle different ways
I can and can't see.
she's growin' fast, I dread the day.
when my little girl
will go away. (Chorus)
(V)
both of us are gettin' older.
hope she knows
she always has my shoulder.
and in those moments when she's down.
that for her
I'll always be around.
(TAG)
in those rare moments
when she's down.
that for her
I'll always be around.
© 2012 by Douglas Murphy
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Hey Douglas, Tweaks below, keep or sweep  She Makes Me.... [08.04.2012] (V) she makes me laugh. she makes me giggle. makes me dance and jump around. she makes me jiggle. she makes me smile throughout the day. she makes me laugh. that is her way. (V) she entertains. she's in her glory. when she talks about her day and tells her stories. she makes me smile. so glad she's here. she makes me laugh throughout the year. (C) that blessing took the guise of a young girl overly shy. who outside of the home spoke not a word. [color:#000099]<<--(phrasing more poetic than conversational[/color]) the cutest little thing who would often dance and sing. who now is always seen and always heard. (V) she's growin' up to o fast before me. in subtle different ways I can and can't see. she's growin' fast, I dread the day. when my little girl will go away. (Chorus) Words in [color:#FF0000]red above are repeated in verses; words/phrases should only be repeated in Choruses. [/color] (V) both of us are gettin' older.( common knowledge; rephrase)
“I usually start with a title or maybe a little rhyme or phrase.” - Harlan Howard
Co-writing = Compromise!
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Awwww...what a wonderful gift for your daughter! Great description -- makes us feel like we know her! Let us know how it goes over with her! Lisa
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Douglas--
I offer as options:
My feelings- CHANGE THE TITLE-- CH is the summary: TO GROWING UP or BLESSING IN DISGUISE
CH
GROWING UP SHE’S OUR BLESSING IN DISGUISE.
ONCE SHE WAS SHY BUT CHANGES EVERY DAY
WHILE AWAY FROM home BOYS GIVE HER THE EYE.
BECOMING OF AGE UPON LIFE’S STAGE
WE WANNA DANCE AND SING OUT LOUD.
GROWING UP SHE’S OUR BLESSING IN DISGUISE.
WRITE ON CANADIAN BRO’
Mackie
Last edited by Mackie H.; 04/09/12 05:24 PM.
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hello Shayne.
thanks for taking the time on this and the food for thought. worth considering.
douglas
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hello Lisa. Thanks for stopping by. Yep! She is something special.
douglas
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hello Mackie.
You made some good points and have also givin me food for thought.
Thanks for taking the time.
douglas
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