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Your thoughts on this please. Mainly should I add a 3rd verse or is it ok as it is.

Thanks
Roger



LONG AGO IN MY TEENAGE YEARS
ROCK ‘N’ ROLL WAS TRULY MY THING
THEN ONE DAY MY EARS WERE WOKEN
A NEW SOUND WAS MAKING ME SING
CAUSE I HEARD THAT COUNTRY MUSIC
AND I FOUND SOMETHING HARD TO BEAT
OH YEAH THAT HONKY TONK RHYTHM
WAS HERE TO GET ME ON MY FEET

(CHORUS)

AND NOW I LOVE
THE SOUND OF THE DOBRO
AND THAT OL’ STEEL GUITAR
THEY BRING MUSIC TO MY EARS
OH YEH I LOVE
THE SOUND OF THE DOBRO
AND THAT OL’ PEDAL STEEL
SOMETIMES THEY’VE BROUGHT ME TO TEARS

IT WAS WAITING IN THE DISTANCE
FOR THE RIGHT TIME TO MAKE IT’S CLAIM
AND NOW THERE’S ONE THING THAT’S CERTAIN
NOT MUCH ELSE MAKES ME FEEL THE SAME
IT CAME CREEPING UP FROM BEHIND
WITH A RHYTHM THAT IS SO STRONG
NOW I FIND IT HARD TO BELIEVE
THAT I IGNORED IT FOR SO LONG

(CHORUS)

(SOLO)

I’M WRAPPED UP IN THE WHOLE THING
CERTAINLY GOT HUGE APPEAL
WHETHER I’M HOME OR ELSEWHERE
NOTHING ELSE GIVES ME THAT FEEL

(CHORUS X 2)

YEH!
THE SOUND OF THE DOBRO

(REPEAT TILL FADE)

Interesting! "the sound of the Dobro" Could you make the chorus stronger by using a different rhyme? "tears" seemed to clash with "get me on my feet"
You might also want to check your cliche lines, the fewer the better.
I enjoyed "waiting in the distance" and "creeping up from behind"
Pam

Roger,

I think you could tidy up the chorus by referring to 'The Dobro' as a singular entity throughout.

So instead of:
"THEY BRING MUSIC TO MY EARS" you could say: "IT BRINGS MUSIC TO MY EARS"

Likewise, you could say: "SOMETIMES IT BRINGS ME TO TEARS".

I think that would sit better with the listener.

All the best,

Andy