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by bennash - 06/07/26 09:34 PM
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This one has been many years in the making. Thought first came to me when I lost my dad in 1996. My mom died three years later. It has taken me twelvae additional years to get this one down on paper, but finally did.
HOW PRECIOUS THE TIME
c2011 Brian Beecher
How precious the time
How precious the time
How precious the time we have
Don’t just trust your luck
As you could be way off track
Important decisions now come back
To make the wrong choice
Rather than the right one haunts
As you go off the deep end
To satisfy another’s wants
How precious the time
How precious the time
How precious the time we have
Complex energies are in force
Putting a damper on your days
Though to get an early start pays
The urge to seek out memories
From childhood or the past
Could provide some respite
In an ages when life moves so fast
How precious the time
How precious the time
How precious the time we have
The ability to cope could be
At a lower ebb as energy
And enthusiasm slide downhill
Pursuits longs and enduring
Are unlikely to stand up
And escapism makes life stand still
How precious the time
How precious the time
How precious the time we have
Last edited by beechnut79; 06/26/17 10:38 AM.
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well sorry about your loss... it's a difficult time to lose loved ones and never gets easier the next time...
Anyways this is a good lyric... I like the chorus the most and your off to a good start on the verses...
I believe you can add to the lyric by putting something personal in like a good experience you had with your parents like a trip or a special time in your lives...
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Hi Brian
Ditto to the comment SP.I like the flow but feel the complex energies V may be a little difficult in a song. JMO
With Regards
Travis
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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Thanks for weighing in on this one. As stated in the intro, it has now been twelve years since I lost my parents. Funny that last night I had a dream of meeting up with them for a typical regret over mistakes made conference. Strange that this one came up after all this time. Usually, though, I cannot remember intimate details of dreams once I awaken. If I did I would have a lot of fodder for songs.
Peace,
Brian
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Hi Brian
This lyric is good but without a melody I have difficulty imagining how its unusual structure goes together.
Good work though.
Vic
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