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http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5-DTw8pP2dQLove, Came Walking By Me......Love came walking by me, Grinning sheepishly, as I looked up, and caught it's eye....
And for a single moment, our eyes met, and held such warmth, but then it passed me by.
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I've been chasing dreams so long, that I can't tell the crack of dawn, from the dark pit of the night, Everytime love did me wrong, I felt so strong for oh, so long, That it would be all right.
There's a small place in my heart, That's waiting to be rented by someone, with no where else to hide, And the price is not unfair, With just a little love and care, They'll have a warm place to abide.
I hope someone reads the sign, in the windows of my eyes, that says there's room to share, cause lonely nights, and empty sighs, Broken dreams, And cold goodbye's Are far to much to bear.
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There a small place in my heart, that's full of cobwebs, I will sweep away, so new love can reside, and the price is not unfair, with just a little love and care, you'll have a warm place to abide, by my side....to abide...by my side...to...abide.
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hello MFB I gave this song a listen, I love the words of this song but for me the phrasing seems to distract from the words. I think the melody is good but maybe work with the meter a bit so that there isn't the feel of a break in between a phrase. This is a beautiful folks tune though very nice and your guitar playing is wonderful.
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Hmmmm...explain phrasing, and the breaks between a phrase...i am confused??? LOL```MFB III
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Hi MFB III, I really like this song I especially like the well-structured vocal melody, and your voice suits the song really well. The lyrics and verses don't seem to match up with the song? Some words are different. Fixed it for ya: ========================= LOVE, CAME WALKING BY ME ========================= VERSE 1 Love came walking by me Grinning sheepishly as I looked up And caught it's eye And for a single moment Our eyes met and held such warmth But then it passed me by... CHORUS 1 I've been chasing dreams so long That I can't tell the crack of dawn From the dark pit of the night Every time love did me wrong I felt so strong for oh, so long That it would be all right... VERSE 2 There's a small space in my heart That's waiting to be rented by someone With nowhere else to hide And the price is not unfair With just a little loving care They'll have a warm place to abide... CHORUS 2 I hope someone reads the sign In the windows of my eyes That says there's room to spare 'Cause lonely nights and empty sighs Broken dreams and cold goodbye's Are far to much to bear... far too much to bear... VERSE 3 There's a small space in my heart That's waiting to be rented by someone With nowhere else to hide And the price is not unfair With just a little loving care They'll have a warm place to abide... CODA By my side To abide by my side To abide by my side To abide... ====================== I like your imagery of "rooms" - empty, rented, space, sign, stay, windows, etc. Especially liked the lines "I hope someone reads the sign, In the windows of my eyes". Cheers, R1NGG1T
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Hi, R1NGG1T---Thanks, now I see what happened, I wrote one version and sang another one from memory when I recorded it...the last verse or so and chorus does not match the song played...see what happens when you record in the wee hours...lol. I am going to bed because it is 4:30 a.m. but I will check out one of our songs tomorrow...what's a good one,that you really enjoy singing???~~~MFB III
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Hey, Finding Bliss, Now I see what you meant....the words on the lyrics above, don't match the song that is played on youtube.com...thanks for commenting, I will return the favor tommorrow...~~MFB III
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Hi MFB, yeah that happens to me too lol no worries.
Good song, keep it up!
Cheers, R1NGG1T
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Hey RING1T thanks for the critique and the helpful heads up. Guess now that it's fixed i'll bump it back up....ready...aim...Kick!~~~~~~MFB III
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