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Whiskey Burn
©2005 Corey Parkman

Monday was hell in the Delta heat
A passing storm poured no relief
From layin’ a highway through the backside of July
Burnt like charcoal and down in his back
Jesse came home grinding an ax
Took it out on Renee as he took down a fifth of rye

And he felt that whiskey burn
Like the Coahoma sun
Renee was cryin’ one day he’ll learn
Someday that boy’s gonna learn

Weekend come, Jesse went to the boats
Renee stayed home, bruises on her throat
Nursing a black eye for askin’ to go along
She poured a remedy for her pain
Though she knew she’d have to explain
She filled up her emptiness till that bottle was gone

And she felt that whiskey burn
Like the Coahoma sun
Renee was cryin’ one day he’ll learn
Someday that boy’s gonna learn

Jesse came in broke and crazy drunk
Reached for his whiskey then threw a punch
B*tch, you’d best get to town and pay back every drop
She fetched a case of his fav’rite kind
Found him passed out and lost her mind
She doused every room, lit a match and telephoned the cops

And she watched that whiskey burn
In the Coahoma sun
Renee was cryin’ he’ll never learn
No, he’s never gonna learn

And she watched that whiskey burn


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[This message has been edited by Corey (edited 06-15-2005).]

Terrific Corey, from beginning, through the
middle and right to the end. Great story!

Diane

Well done Corey,

Although I'm not familiar with..
Coahoma

I felt like I was reading a movie.

Calvin

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Thanks a lot, Diane. I haven't written a story song in a while... glad you liked it.

Corey

Thanks Calvin. Coahoma's a country in northwest MS (in the delta).

CP

Kinda like Independence Day 2

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Probably more like Deliverance II.

CP

This does have the same theme as Independence Day-abused wife torches house and husband. I read that Gretchen Peters had the chorus (and what a great one it is)
complete and spinning in her head long before she even knew what the song was going to be about.

Corey, I think you have a good story and a good hook but if there is anyway you can make that chorus soar like the one in Independence day, then you have something.

corey... damn... i'm depressed now!! LOL i hope this wasn't a personal story!! good job. scotty

Corey...

I LOVE this...especially the first two lines and the ending...wow! Your lyrics have such great imagery..Beautiful!

Emily

Thanks NC. I'm seeing this more as an outlaw or alt-country type song, so I'm not sure a big chorus would fit. And yeah, Independence Day is a killer song - one of the few Martina McBride songs I'll listen to anytime.

Corey

Thanks Scotty. No need to be depressed... it's all made up. Well, I'm sure something similar has happened, but I didn't experience it. Glad you stopped by for the read.

Corey