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by bennash - 06/07/26 09:34 PM
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Ok, sat down and wrote this after work today. Tried hard to use what I learned from Wyman and Bobbie. Not sure, so be tough! EVen a rock can learn if it gets pounded long enough and hard enough *GRIN*
Thanks in advance,
Robert
Lord Teach Me
(To Be Your Servant)
© Robert C. Evans
January 12, 2001
Chorus
Lord teach me to be your servant
That I may worship you
Let others see the love of Christ
In everything I do
V1
I Want to be like the man who
Brings all the children on the bus
He’s always there through rain or shine
I’d like to be part of his crew
V2
The man who sits on the back pew
Greeting all that come through the door
He has a smile for everyone
Always has a kind word or two (Chorus)
V3
They teach at the academy
Teaching math and morality
Wish I could have been taught like that
It’s a place every child should be
V4
Thanks for the man who’s reaching me
Lessons gleaned from your holy word
The shepherd who cares for your flock
Cause without him were would I be (Chorus)
[This message has been edited by rce_otr (edited 01-12-2001).]
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hI..Robert...I loved your chorus... I see your trying different rhymein...Do you think the first verse works rhyme wise..and the sound of it? I think the rest do..imo..Content.verse 4 I think needs re-constructed to be clearer on who you're talkin about..I know...but don't think it's as clear as it should be....my take. and on that...Why not substitute Christ in first line. of that verse..don't think on these types of songs it can be overemphasized, ya know? Kaley ![[Linked Image]](http://www.justplainfolks.org/ubb/smile.gif) ....
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LOL, Kaley I'm laughing at me, not you!
The 4th verse really needs work! The man I was referring to was the preacher, not Christ.
For me, I've heard the pastor referred to as a shepherd so many times it was just automatic for me. Asked my teenage daughter, she thought I meant Christ also.
So.. thanks for the help, I will work on the 4th verse. The 1st verse however, at the moment I disagree with you and rather like it as is. However, if your willing to be more blunt with me, why doesn't it work for you? I'm open to being educated, as always.
Thanks again,
Robert
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Robert...hi...I don't know...I studied it and studied it ..and said I don't know... but maybe it has to do with the "WHO" I guess I thought that belonged with the Phrase on the Next Line line....imo hey, by the way...I took a try at my first Contemporary Christian Song under the unlikely title....The Lion's Gonna Roar. Kaley. ..hope you get another take on this... hey...I went back and took a look at your last verse...and I see what you're sayin... because the ministers are to act as sheperds..with their flocks...but I'm glad you laughed...and didn't think i was Krazy... well maybe I am........hehe
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