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by bennash - 06/07/26 09:34 PM
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Hi This is my first try at songwriting. I was wondering if anyone had any comments.
It's a little cliche I know.
"Here I Am"
There was a time
When you were mine
Not long ago for me
Love blossomed so fast
You were scared it wouldn't last
But Baby can't you see (that)
Here I am- my love is tried and true
and only meant for you
This I hope to prove
Here I am -and this is where I'll stay
waiting for your love
To come on back my way
Here I am
You walked away
Afraid to stay
And open up to me
Give your heart a chance
To feel joy and romance
I promise you will see (that)
Here I am- My love is tried and true
and only meant for you
This I hope to prove
Here I am- And this is where I'll stay
Waiting for your love
To come on back my way
Here I am
True love is meant to be
One day I know you'll see (that)
repeat chorus
copyright 2001
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Hi Hurley,
Welcome! For your first try you've done really well. Your song is structured very nicely, and you've got nice placement of your title and hook.
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Hi Hurley..and welcome...I agree with Char
this was a good first start...and you have
it set up nicely...Hope you stay
and keep writing.
Kaley
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Thank you both for answering. I'll hopefully post again soon. Trying to still figure out if this is for me or not.
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Much better than my first attempt.
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