Nameless As A Rose

time is a contradiction
it keeps moving foward
it keeps on floundering

boundaries connect
boundaries seperate
all is circumspect

the day before blank
the day after empty
today she said no thanks

favorite color black
close my eyes
time off the track

and i wonder
when the shade was pulled
and i wonder
how was i so fooled
and i wonder
about the ox and the mule

somewhere a flower grows
innocent, like a warm hello
nameless as a rose

time is a contradiction
it keeps moving foward
it keeps on floundering

the day before blank
the day after empty
today she said no thanks

who am i to argue
who am i to debate
when i don't have a clue
about the will of fate

somewhere a flower grows
innocent, like a warm hello
nameless as a rose

© 2005 by ritt

® 2005 random noise music


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Cool stuff Ritt.

This part is real nice and seems to be the most songlike to me.

"somewhere a flower grows
innocent, like a warm hello
nameless as a rose"

I was floundering a bit with the musical feel of the rest but then like the song says...."It had to be you"

Good work!

Eric

This is nice - kinda simple and sad.

My favourite part is the same as Calvin's.

Diane

Hi Diane and the unCalvin kanook

floundering is bugging me

do you two think "meandering" would be better?

oops! -sorry Eric!

Meandering's good - or you could say

it keeps meandering forward

And then think of a different next line!

Great words. I love the first three lines:
"time is a contradiction
it keeps moving foward
it keeps on floundering"

The lyrics in general, I think are great. Mostly cuz they resonant with ME.
But those first few lines really kicked me.

-danj

Ritt - I love these lines:

the day before blank
the day after empty

I think those lines could be the start of their own song. Kind of like a spinoff.

I also like the "and I wonder" verse

seperate should be "separate"

You have a unique way with words Ritt. I enjoyed this. Anne

Floundering makes me think of flopping around, like a fish out of water. Meandering is a more peaceful image, like a brook. So, your choice of words will depend on what image you're looking for.



[This message has been edited by Anne Meredith-Will (edited 01-07-2005).]

Classic SJ here

I'm with the Bemidji Babe on this ...if you want the meandering image, make the change... but given what you say...its a contradiction, methinks you want floundering as a contrast to moving forward.


Ciao

Hey, Ritt -

This is very nice. One of your more understandable ones. Seriously, I really dig this. I would vote for "meandering", though. Guess it depends on what you were trying to say, but it better suits the mood I was getting while reading. Nice work, my friend.

Randy

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Thanks again Diane

I think I'm going to stay with floundering as it does keep the intended meaning, besides it's Okeretta's wish...

That's ok Ritt - I appreciate the importance of not crossing Okeretta!

Lots of good lines, Ritt. I hear this as rock! I especially like the hook.

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Hello Ritt,

I enjoyed reading this & I especially like what Calvin said.
He has good taste.
Just messin' with ya Diane !

Calvin

Thanks Danj

a vote for floundering!

Glad you enjoyed!

Thanks Anne

sometimes i think it's words that have their way with me....

Glad you found lots to like...floundering it will be!

Hey Big John V

glad you enjoyed!!!

Yeah floundering makes the most sense in context....so it stays!

Thanks Randy

Glad you liked, gonna go with floundering, i've been kanooked into it...

Thanks Tricia

Glad you enjoyed

thinking more mellow actually....