Untraveled Roads
Verse
I’ve met interesting people
Who’ve lived out their dreams.
I’ve heard fantastic stories
Of places they’ve seen.
I have spent my life dreaming
I’ve stayed home alone.
I’ve never ventured
Down untraveled roads.
Pre chorus
So many things I’ve never tried.
Been preoccupied
Can’t find enough time.
Chorus
I’ve seen pictures of places
That I’d like to go.
They’re adventures imagined
Of untraveled roads.
Verse
I stay too busy working
Keep putting off plans
I keep dreaming that someday
I’ll see foreign lands.
I’ve heard fantastic stories
Great things that they did.
While I live in this jar
Held back by a lid.
Pre chorus
So many things I’ve never tried.
Been preoccupied
Can’t find enough time.
Chorus
I’ve seen pictures of places
That I’d like to go.
They’re adventures imagined
Of untraveled roads.
Bridge
Keep saying some day
I’ll make time to go.
I’ll make time to go
Down untraveled roads.
Verse
I’ve met interesting people
Who’ve lived out their dreams.
I’ve heard fantastic stories
Of places they’ve seen.
I have spent my life dreaming
I’ve stayed home alone.
I’ve never ventured
Down untraveled roads.
Pre chorus
So many things I’ve never tried.
Been preoccupied
I can’t find the time.
Chorus
I’ve seen pictures of places
That I’d like to go.
They’re adventures imagined
Of untraveled roads.

well done a universal theme

I wonder if there is a way of drawing in the audience, some might say " ya but at least you're up there singing"...know what I mean...being the devils advocate

Maybe make it about a mother making sacrifices

Untravelled Roads

Verse
She met interesting people
Who lived out their dreams.
She's heard fantastic stories
Of places she's not seen.
She spent her life dreaming
Stayed right close to home
And never ventured
Down untravelled roads.

Pre chorus
Many things Mama never tried.
Was preoccupied
Couldn't find enough time.

Chorus
Mama saw pictures of places
That she’d like to go.
Imaging adventures
Of untravelled roads.

ckiphen,

Some nice lyrics here; they have a solid rhythm that would lend well to song. Neil has an interesting idea of changing this to third person—might provide an opportunity for an emotional bridge (e.g., keeping with Neil’s idea of it being about a mother, or someone close, the singer finds himself remembering her while in a foreign place . . if that makes sense). Something to consider and play with.

I really liked the line “While I live in this jar, held back by a lid”. But the couplet that proceeds it may need some tweaking (e.g., who is the “they” that you refer to?).

Enjoyed the read.

Best regards,

Deej

You strike a great note of wistfulness with this with an idea that I think everyone can relate to. Certainly I can, as my motto over the last few years has been "F* some day - some day is here." I would just look at some small points of language to avoid repetition and tighten it up, such as:

I’ve met interesting people
Who’ve lived out their dreams.
I’ve heard fantastic stories
Of places they’ve seen.
I have spent my life dreaming (maybe "wishing" to avoid dream twice in the same verse?)
BUT stayed home alone.
I’ve never ventured
Down untraveled roads.

I’ve seen pictures of places
That I’d like to go.
They’re adventures imagined
DOWN untraveled roads.

I stay too busy working
Keep putting off plans
I keep dreaming that someday (maybe "hoping" since you've said dreaming before?)
I’ll see foreign lands.
I’ve heard fantastic stories
Great things that they did.
While I live in this jar
Held back by a lid.

I'd also think about flipping the first four lines with the second four in this verse to better mirror the first verse. I'm not sure about repeating the first verse to end the song. Both verses kind of say the same thing, so saying it three times seems a bit much to me. Maybe a verse about how he's resolving not to sit by the sidelines anymore or maybe how he travels via other means (maps, books, etc.) - a glimpse of a possible future? Or maybe just repeat the last 4 lines of the verse?

Great song. I'd love to hear the melody!

Jo Nell

Thanks for the input. No melody. I'm not a musician.