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Fresh ink. I was commenting on a post when I wrote this title/hook and soon there was a lyric. It wrote itself, well just about.
Nothing Ventured Nothing Gained
If you don't want a broken heart Lock it in a box Or hide it in a dresser drawer Under all your socks Cause if you believe in love Someday you will fall You can't win another's If you don't give your all
Nothing ventured---------------------------} Chorus Nothing gained You won't feel the pleasure If you don't risk the pain Once your heart has broken You say never again but Nothing ventured Nothing gained
Turnaround 4 bars
I have lost at love More times than I can say But each time I arise To face another day I know nothings better When two hearts beat as one I won't give up on love Till all my days are done Nothing ventured---------------------------} Chorus Nothing gained You won't feel the pleasure If you don't risk the pain Once your heart has broken You say never again but Nothing ventured Nothing gained
Instrumental Break 8 Bars
Nothing ventured---------------------------} Chorus Nothing gained You won't feel the pleasure If you don't risk the pain Once your heart has broken You say never again but Nothing ventured Nothing gained
Nothing Ventured Nothing Gained
Copyright 11/2019 John W Selleck BMI
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John,
Some nice lines here. I might be inclined to shorten the 3rd and 4th line of the chorus to match the number of syllables in the first two lines--though really depends on the melody you have in mind. And depending on the tempo, you may want to consider adding a bridge . . . though, again, always tough to say without a melody behind it.
But as it stands, a really strong start lyrically.
All my best,
Deej
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Hi Deej, Thanks for the visit and the comments. I see and hear many songs that draw out words or let the music carry until the next line. This is the idea behind those two lines. it actually flows pretty good. the bridge Idea I have been thinking about. I'll have to time it out. This one should go about 130-140 BPM and definitely country.
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130-140 traditional country swing/strum! Yep, this one sings itself too lol... Nice one. I just wonder if there’s a more clever way to say "Nothing ventured Nothing gained..." Not that there’s anything wrong with it, it just feels a bit generic.
If you don’t dance Then don’t complain...
If you don’t play You lose the same...
Roll the dice Or quit the game...
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Hi JAPOV, Thanks for the visit and the kind words. This one was written with a specific person in mind and this is the very first thought that ran through my mind to tell her. Yes, it is a cliche, but there is a reason for cliches, most of them make sense. I actually wrote a "Cliche" song and posted it here a while ago,"Tell Her How Ya Feel" . It sounds like you have the start of a good hook/song there.
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