First of all get that mandoliner a double shot of gentlemen Jack, on me. Wonderful job

When I heard the first 2 lines I knew it was real life.
Plus it's so long with no repetition, which is so easy to do when something is really personal. A nit to some, a plus in my book.
I can hear some serious power lurking just beneath the surface in your vocals. This is such a great write, if one of your bands don't jump on this, you need new band mates. What are you in 2 or 3 bands... if shouldn't be a problem flushing this one out.
Look if you work out some harmonies and a kick ass chorus.
This one's a wrap.

This could be your signature song.

Hell, I can hear the boots on the dance floor, as I'm typing. smile
Seriously... Get UR Done Gurl