Sounds good to me.
Flows nicely.
I'd be with Kevin and a couple others though, it ran too long for me.
IMO I wouldn't want to see the verses cut but as Mike said the second or third C could be cut and bring it in fine.
Ya' know, we're songwriters, we're interested in music and songs but "commercially" people are just there to be "entertained" and it doesn't take long to lose their interest if the song is too long, even if it "is' good
Just my 2 cents--Still a good job all around
Wy