Hey Dan

An interesting song format on this one for sure . The vibe and story are holding me just fine , the delivery tempo seems like a perfect fit ..... so I guess my problem with the length of this continuous verse song has to do with my subconscious mind impatiently waiting for a melody/delivery change (IE a chorus or bridge lift) that years of music has trained it to expect ..... or possibly I'm suffering a flash-back from all those damn songwriting books I used to use as a bible crazy


The theme, delivery , and story progression was very mood-setting as you have it ..... (as I said) the story is holding my interest to the end ..... so I guess what's missing is the video which I'd love to see grin .


Very interesting song .

Don
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