Thanks meerkat! I hope the only genre represented here is not what BAL thinks is appropriate. I've been a musician alot longer than I've been a writer and I almost always have a musical framework to work in before writing and this one is no different. I'll have something up to listen to this week for comments and critiques . The " get out of the way" is the hook because it is the point of the lyric. It may not be what some would see as a commercial hook but that is not why I write. I write because I have to and I'm not concerned whether it's commercial or not. The formula for writing hits is "being in the right place at the right time" from my experience so i just keep writing original lyrics and maybe my time will come or not. I'm still a songwriter and musician.