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Halflives
by Gary E. Andrews - 03/24/25 02:51 PM
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Zegovia
by Gary E. Andrews - 03/20/25 08:15 PM
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Here's one Max invited me to do with him and Franco.Thanx Max and Franco!Max wrote the first verse and i wrote the others,Franco laid down some awesome guitar. http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=12081886Travelin' Home I've seen the red valley where they search for gold The young and the old,now i'm a travelin' home I've seen the green river where they search for silver Takers and givers,i'm a travelin' home mmm mmm travelin' home,mmm mmm trvelin' home I've seen a memory flash in my mind A vision of you from good old times I see your sweet eyes and beautiful smile I'll be coming home in a little while mmm mmm travelin' home,mmm mmm travelin' home I've seen the dawn awake and soothe my soul As life unfolds i'm a travelin' home Seen the day close its eyes dreams i hold Stories be told i'm a travelin' home mmm mmm travelin' home,mmm mmm travelin' home The land and sea that i wandered on Taught me much i need to pass it along But one real treasure that i dearly miss Is your sweet kiss ever since i've been gone mmm mmm travelin' home,mmm mmm travelin' home I've seen the red valley where they're searching for old Th e young and the old i'm a travelin' home I've seen the green river where they searching for silver Takers and givers i'm a travelin' home mmm mmm travelin' home,mmm mmm travelin' home mmm mmm travelin' home,mmm mmm travelin' home
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Hey Michael, Happy new year to you and yours. Nice clean laid-back sound..Good for the soul!
Doug
Learn all the musical rules inside and out- Then break 'em...
Grace..Peace...Love
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Thanx for checkin' this out Doug!Happy New Year to ya!Mike
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Good stuff my brother. Excellent lyric and bouncy melody. Can't be bad. Thanks for sharing. Sounds like it could be a Lyle Lovett song and that's a very good thing.
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Hi Michael.
Generally speaking this is a pretty good song. It is so easy to always just "pat people on the back and say I enjoyed the song." But I feel as a songwriter and composer, a responsibiltly to sometimes be honest and straight-forward when I think I might be of help. This song IMHO, needs a bridge to break from that phrase "I'm a travelin' home." It's ok not to have a chorus hook with a song if the verse melody is strong enough to carry the song. But sometimes, without a chorus, at least a bridge is needed to digress from the established melody pattern--not in all cases, but a bridge would be helpful here I believe, after listening to your song.
Having said that, it is just my opinion, and my opinion is nothing more than opinion. I just think the song as is, is not a finished product, though there definitely is potential here. Even a "good melody" and certain lyric phrases need a break....
steady-eddie.
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Hi Michael...
That was a real nice listen. Had my toe tapping all the way through. I do tend to agree with Eddie about a bridge. Sometimes a quick switch for a couple of lines renews and refreshes the song mid-way through. I use bridges very sparingly...only if I think the song really needs one. in the case, I'd probably at least consider the idea. But, what you have is sounding real good! Wishing you and your cowriters a terrific 2013. You guys work really good together.
Alan
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hey,thanx a bunch Lil' Stevie!
Hi Eddie,always wanna hear your opinion,it does mean a lot!i think a bridge wouldn't hurt but i also like the way it is now too.That guitar solo really breaks it up for me.Thanx for your time and thoughts!Mike
Hey David,we appreciate your time and comments on this one!Max will have to answer on the bridge thoughts as this is his territory.Thanx for the kind words!Mike
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I'm here! thanks friends, good comments here - dont be afraid to speak your mind, it really helps. Had a lot of thinking about the structure of this one: 4 verse too much repeating? the idea of a bridge was considered, but: notice that the solo melody you can sing it as it were part of the song melody (that is a rare skill by Franco), so that is the bridge. Maybe it comes too late? Better move the 4th verse after it so we have 3 verses - instrum. bridge - 2 verses? perhaps, heck, but it's done!
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You guys brought it home for me. If you add a bridge or more verses or another solo, that's alright too. I'll still be listening.
An ego under its own power travels assback. ~ Smarticus
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hey now,thanx a lot Taggy!
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Miichael, Just had a listen to this one. You got a jaunty beat and tune going here. This sounds radio ready to me. The lyrics glide right along with the melody and nothing sounds out of place. The lyrics and the music mesh. There's some good songwriting and playing and singing. No nitpicking from me.
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MICHAEL, MAX, FRANCO--
A REAL NICE MOVING SONG--
AFTER VERSE 3, AN OPTIONAL MUSICAL, SHIFTIN' GEARS, BRIDGE WOULD PUT THE CORK IN THE BOTTLE--JMHO--I'M THINKIN' OUT LOUD AGAIN!
I LIKE THIS ONE A LOT!
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hey,thanx a bunch Dan,much appreciated! Mike
Hey Mackie,thanx for droppin' by and your thoughts!i appreciate that! Mike
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MIKE,I like the song I think whatever you want to do with it add a bridge another solo or keep just the way it is you have a good song .I WENT BACK AND TOOK ANOTHER LISTEN LOVE THE MUSIC!!!!.........MIKE
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Michael,
Really nice verse melody and idea, does need a chorus to keep it interesting, but overall I like it.
Since I'm in the duet frame of mind, I had a thought that you could also change up a few verses where a female could sing "C'mon Home" and then have a killer chorus added and you could get a couple songs out of this...just thinking out loud..LOL!!
Nice.
Tammy
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Thanx a bunch Mike,we appreciate that!Mike
Hey thanx for your thoughts on this one Tammy!Yeah,i don't know any "females" who sing,do you?LOL.I see what ya mean with all the options but Max would have to give a thumbs up on all those ideas.By the way,you're doin' great in the duet role!Thanx,Mike
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hi guys, bridge or not...GOOD WORK ! but I vote for a bridge to make it even BETTER. Thanks for the entertainment. Calvin http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart
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Silly me. I thought this was going to be a song called "Travelin' Home With Max & Franco".
I'd have to echo all the other sentiments about the repetitiveness (is that ven a word?) of this song. There's a fine line between a groove and a rut. Something needs to change along the way.
Good sound, though....
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thanx for your inputage Calvin!Mike
Hey Kurt,i appreciate your thoughts on this one!LOL,no,i'm not headed to Italy yet.Mike
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hey kurt, Travelin' Home With Max & Franco would be such a funny title LOL that it's worth thinking about! thank you all, you sure made my day I'll remember all of your comments for next ones (Tammy is your a proposal LOL ? good to hear, be prepared ;-)
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